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@wuntyphyve Day 1 I find the lengthy teasing somewhat frustrating, but rest assured this is purely a matter of personal taste. If you've read anything of mine, you know that pacing-wise, I'm considerably more prone to saying hello, punching someone in the face and then galloping off in a series of calamities. The metaphors are fucking beautiful. The description of the reluctant plod to bed, followed by the harried waking and then culminating in the sands of time - just fucking beautiful. With the beach, we get something more like the sort of scene story-meat I digest more readily, although you still haven't told us about the ghost, you bugger. This is good. It's not very much to my personal taste, but despite that, the writing itself oozes competency and you should be proud of it. @salaman Cheers man, you're always a kind reader. There were a lot more fuck ups than parroting tiny table =D I'm glad you're engaged enough to have missed most of them. @cosmicfuzz Two lines are better then no lines! Use them to boost your upwards and onwards. |
#11631840, By MetalDog National Novel Writing Month (Nanowrimo) 2016
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