@rice_sandwich day 4&5, to start with OI! You manage to make the north sound like a sort of medieval wasteland!|
“Oh yeah, up north? I haven’t been up there for years.”
“I went up a few months ago. I took Amanda to show her the sights. She loves castles.”
Regional sensibilities aside, you nailed the description of my shed then set up some really good back story.
The stuff about the pregnancy was a little jarring, but you are establishing a load of characters I want to know much more about.
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