@The12thMonkey 5-6, Dean and back to Anthony|
Almost felt sea sick reading about Dean - the conflict with his father ("Get out of my sight, Dean" was impactful) and his lack of real need to be on the boat.
Then back to Anthony - I like a lot how you give more explanation on the character second time round. We now know what he does (and probably why his car is covered in crap). It was an exciting scene, but all happened very quickly. Probably space to add more detail in second draft (having said that, I do appreciate getting to "meat" of the action).
Now I'm trying to link up a museum curator, fisherman, fracker and lady who can't afford her flat in my head. You've got me guessing and I like it!
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