#12336348, By sunjumper NaNoWriMo 2018

  • sunjumper 15 Nov 2018 00:13:41 3,490 posts
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    Carbon_Altered wrote:
    Chapter 7, damn it I love how you describe the weather! Great start. Also like the bit about the lights only serving to further highlight the dark, really helped me picture the inside of the mill.

    Barbara turns from a nice if generic old lady into a genuinely fascinating character. I just wonder what her price to Jenny will eventually be.

    And then I got to the bit at end, you cheeky scamp!!
    You know what they say: 'A real genius steals.'
    Thank you for the feedback as always it helps a lot and as you can see feedback can also shape the way a story unfolds.

    While I'm still unhappy with chapter 8, chapter 9 is shaping up much better, which reminds me that I should be writing...

    And Chapter 9 is done. It is very short not quite 1k, it is more of an intermission but I think it should stand alone. I wish I could have written more today. But I am happy with the result. (although I suspect that it is full of half dead sentences, I really need to sleep more)

    Edited by sunjumper at 01:06:47 15-11-2018
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